Thursday 31 March 2011

Guy Fawkes Day

Guy Fawkes Day Sub-Zero owned the cold, frozen night in Auckland. The sky was pitch dark, and the right sort of colour for fireworks to light it up on Guy Fawkes Night. Everyone was waiting for the crashes and the bangs. Suddenly…. Fireworks shot, Sky lit, Kids screamed. Bang! Bang! Bang! Crash! Boom!!! The grass lit up from the spinning cascades and dogs ran yelping around in fear and confusion at what was happening. “Don’t get too close to the fireworks,” the parents warned. The best fireworks had only begun. Benjamin

14 comments:

  1. Benjamin
    The vocabulary in your writing made my mind explode with images! Brilliant work. I'll keep coming back to check what else you'e written.
    Mrs Manickum
    Room 5
    St Patrick's

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  2. Some great vocabulary choices here Benjamin, Well done. I look forward to reading more of your posts on your class blog.

    Miss G :-)

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  3. This is an amazing piece of writing,and its by me.

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  4. AWESOMENESS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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  5. You are very talented

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  6. yeah Benjamin you are talented but i really mean your story is talented and IS AWESOME AND EXTRAORDINARY

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  7. Well done Ben Keep writing good stories

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  8. brilliant story

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  9. lol, th whole family commntd :D

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  10. DEAR BEN .. you rock !!!!!!
    HERE COMES THE NEXT ROALD DAHL .. :D

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  11. what a story son

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